I am a student at St. Bernadette's School. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Thursday, 15 November 2018
The Party that when wrong
Hi my name is Ben. I was at school and my friend called Jack gave me a invitation his party. It was at 6 so time went by and it was time to go. There I was standing there and before my friend could say hi BOOM every thing was on fire me and the other people ran. We all got into cars or ran home we rang 111 the fire came with there Syrians. On and racing to the party it was not really a party so they were using lots of water and BOOM it burst into flames angin. It was like when you blow out candies it re lights the self weard. It keeped re lighting its self and it took like an hour to stop it but it was worth it. Ben thorght to himself well if I was that party boy my birthday would be boomed well that was wast of time and them by mum looked on face book and there it was a picture of the fire my mum ran into the room saying are you all right are you answer me I said yes it was just shocking mum was really scared but that is OK. THE END. This is unfinished
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One thing i like about your story is that it is really interesting.
ReplyDeleteanother is that it was kinda funny.
but i wish you told me if it was 6 in the morning or 6 in the evening. if it was in the morning though....;-;